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Basara 2007-07-08 ch 1,	abusetry to reduce those words... 5-7-5... but well, if this is an experiment... not bad then... nice...
tearing hands 2007-07-04 ch 1,	abuseIf I counted correctly, your poem is 7 syllables, 7 syllables, and 10 syllables. A haiku is 5-7-5. Syllables aside, it's a really good poem. Maybe you could try to condense it into a haiku or turn it into a tanka (5-7-5-7-7).