First sentence error. Confusing. Hes following the scent hes smelling or the scent he's giving off? If its the first one then it should be *He made his way through the woods, following ~the/a~ scent*

this chapter is kind of short but oh wells. still..I think you should separate more paragraphs for easy reading =] But that's just me talking...>.>

Noo! He bit her?? =[ and also the point of view changes again xD Just telling you that..umm..let's see..oh yeah! I really like the idea of war between angels and vampires ^-^ I loove them both! Whoa..you have 19 chapters O_o I don't think I could try to finish it all in one day but I'll try to finish as much as I can..and I'll review on the way =]

^__^ Wow, so descriptive. But I think you should indent the paragraphs more since I kept losing my place @_@ and some of the perspective is switched like here-

his however, happened not so often as how they were creatures of great intelligence and would use their magic to prevent us from getting as close. They could heal, make some form of invisible shield that would protect humans and themselves that would be of damaging pain to us. They could do only so much however as could we, but the tension could not be denied. Very little humans knew of this and would try to protect the others by not spreading the word but taking extreme caution such as not letting them out at night by themselves, as if that would work. No matter, the war had been going for centuries and until one species would win the fight they would continue this way.

It says us and so on..and also at the part where the girl saw vampires for the first time..it's in a different point of view somewhere...

but overall it's a really good descriptive first chapter ^^ Off to the next one...

And the plot thickens.

As always, fantastic job. I loved this chapter. I feel for Ayden and all the confusion he's got to go through.

Hope to read more soon!

~Carm~

This is an intriguing premise for a story. Keep it up.

Will Ayden face his destiny? I'm on the edge of my seat here, just waiting for more. Update soon, 'kay?

~carm~

Lovely, really lovely chapter. You make me speechless sometimes. And it's not easy to make me speechless.

Update soon! Or I think I might go through withdrawal symptoms :)

~carm~

Brilliant.

Just one thing, though. At the very beginning, in those first few paragraphs, you say 'she', but we don't know who 'she' is until later on. Maybe just pop a name in there somewhere to clear it up. But no biggie :)

Update soon!

~carm~

:D

My face looks like the smiley face up there. I liked the ending of this chapter a lot. Nice job :)

Update soon!

~carm~

Do I even have to say it? I guess I will anyways :) This chapter was wonderful. I would've read it sooner except that there is something wrong with Fictionpress right now. I see you've got another chapter up...I'm off to go read it!

~carm~

Well, there you go. You've gone and impressed me once again. This was incredible.

Hey, just a random, curious-on-my-part question. How long does it take you to write a chapter of this length, or about this length?

Update soon!

~carm~

I'm so sorry it took me awhile to R & R. Been on vacation :)

Very, very good chapter. This story just seems to get better and better with each chapter. Fantastic job, and I can't wait for more of this! You've got me hooked.

~carm~

PS
Dedicated?? Wow. I'm quite honoured :) Just keep up the amazing work.

Very interesting chapter. I like the way you delved into the past a bit, giving us an idea of their history. Fantastic job. Can't wait for more!

Happy Friday the 13th :)

~carm~

This story makes me inexplicably happy. I think it's the way you blend detail with simple narration. It's just...so nice :) So, fantastic chapter, and update soon!

~carm~