hah! thats wonderful!...well not wonderful, amusing though

The story-narrative feel to this works well to create an atmosphere that the reader can see clearly, and therefore understand readily due to the universalitality of the emotions involved. We've all done this. Taken our eyes off of our intended course to gaze longingly at someone in the distance. This captures that exquisitely. Very well written. MD:77.

Wow! What a lovely change from the whole, "Oh, I'm bleeding black poison tears look at me cry I'm really emo and life sucks watch me as i cut myself wide open" like everyone else does...even my work does involve this shit (kind of). I am so proud.