 Who-Says-I-Can't-Use-A-Skillet 2009-11-27 . chapter 18Yay, what a fantastic update!
I love this story and where it's going - though I'd like to see a little more interaction between Matt and Jamie, whether that be romantically or not.
Uhm, the only thing I have a problem with is that Matt's 'issues' seem to disappear, which messes up the continuity. Maybe if you address that a little more, go in depth?
Anyway, I'll be looking forward to your next chapter!
-Georgia |
 lOVe BUq 2009-11-19 . chapter 18Aww they saidd thee same thinqq the forever and ever. Loll nicee chapterr(: |
 BringAFriend 2009-11-19 . chapter 18I love the story! Except how old is Matthew? It was never actually defined, so I was just wondering. Also, the ending of this recent chapter made me extremely happy. I really like how you portray Matthew as being a sweet kind of guy. One word of advice though. When you are writing and Matthew is talking to Kelli, it kind of feels like an awkward conversation. Even though Matthew likes her, I still get an awkward tone while reading. Great story! Keep it up! |
 TheKuchikiDuchess 2009-11-12 . chapter 17this story is just so good and realistic...
and i love the chemistry between mathew and jamie
lol..
he is such a dweeb and she is a rebel!...its really cute...
hey...
will there be future lemon??
just askinngg!
=D XDXD
keep up the great work and update promptly!! |
 Breezy 2009-10-26 . chapter 2 Yeah, okay... I really feel like I can't continue with this story. However, I do want to say:
Your writing is okay. I haven't really noticed any problems grammatically, and your spelling is good. That's a big + for me on FP.
It's mainly the characterization that's an issue. The psychologist is EXTREMELY immature, arguing with his seventeen-year old patient, and is just very unprofessional. It's okay to follow the quirky, a little reclusive characterization, but this just borders on the unreal and makes it hard to stomach. |
 Breezy 2009-10-26 . chapter 1 I don't know of any buildings, especially office buildings, which allow you to smoke indoors? Maybe it's a state-by-state thing, but that seems a little unrealistic to me.
Also,
"Without warning, he suddenly let out a high - pitched scream as he continued to rock back and forth, his hands still covering his ears. She was so surprised by the scream that she quit cursing and simply watched him as he continued screaming."
That seems pretty unrealistic to me as well. He's a grown man, and a psychologist. I mean, I get what you're trying to do with characterization...kind of...but he should know how to have some semblance of self-control. |
 blondiexoxo 2009-10-26 . chapter 17hey i really like this story so far
i hope u update soon
i want to see what happens next |
 VampireAcademyDB 2009-10-25 . chapter 17:'( awesomee chapter.. that stupid ** ** ** prick of an ** tried to touch Kelli! ughh... Update Soon! |
 Cheating 2009-08-23 . chapter 16I love it :] You are an excellent writer, and I look foreward to updates! |
 VampireAcademyDB 2009-08-22 . chapter 16Awesome story! I LOVE IT its so well written and just aw... I hope we find out y Jamie wears those hats n I hope she starts wearing clothes that are meant for her... if u kno what I mean... well Update Soon! |
 mia 2009-08-03 . chapter 1 update. update. update. update. update. please? |
 Rent head 2009-07-14 . chapter 15 Okay, if you don't update soon, I might just go insane. Love the story. Love love LOVE it! Please please please update soon. I check EVERYDAY! |
 lOVe BUq 2009-07-12 . chapter 15qood chapter(: |
 gooshey 2009-07-06 . chapter 15 I just found your story and even though I wasn't planning on it read it in one sitting; even though I had chores to do,lol. I really, really, really like it so far and hope you continue it. |
 jobrogirl1995 2009-07-06 . chapter 15Yay there dating. I hope everything out fine though=D please update soon |