That was really good, and sad, too. You're a good poet. I don't know much about poetry, so I can't really give you any advice. But I like the poem. XD

I'm very selective saying to authors that their work is magnificent, but this was amazing. I wouldn't change anything in it.

I quite like it.

My favorite part would have to be the Star Wars comparison, but then again, I'm a nerd.

I really don't see much improvement to be done with this poem. Periods, maybe. That's about it. Body-wise, I love it.