Can't wait to read more!! >< It seems like it is going to be really good!! ^.^

Looks good. I like it so far...

It seems good so far. I'm really getting in to it. Hope you update!

ooki ooki! (srry, i say that sometimes...) pick me pick me! -jumping up and down with hand in air- i know where jackson and bethany are!! -evil grin- good chapter! but didn't they have no milk? how did matt drink milk?? did tally not see it or something? update soon!!

“The point is their gone,” Tally interrupted.

You mean "they're" which is a contraction of they and are. There were similar grammar mistakes that you should look for.

Also, maybe you could add to the fear?

i like it. i want to read more of it.

I think you should continue it. It seems like a good plot and you can write really good and you could take this story far. :)

CONTINUE IT PLEASE! i LOVE stories about murder! horror is my thing, never get scared by it, i just laugh at it...my friends and family think i'm an evil killer demon...any way, if u want tips on scary stuff, then you are reading the right review. i tend to think that horror isn't scary enough. now tell me if u are planning to make it bloody, or mystery, or gory, and so on. then i will give u tips that u can or can't use, i don't care. i just want u to continue this story!