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| Samana 2008-04-25 ch 1,  | abuseThis is wonderful. I love the line "with the voice of a dying leaf" relaly rounded off the imagery well. I recently returned to fictionpress, i was formerly gandhilover changed my name and posted a new writing and your profile was the first one i looked at. and im glad i did. this is lovely. Hope return and post more soon. |
| Icicle Tears 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abuseWow...this made me wipe an eye. Terribly sad--yet terribly fulfilling. I wonder if I should feel guilty? Hmm... If I turn/My lead-heavy/Spinning-vision head/I might be able to see it clearly./But I won't./Not for me, and especially not for you. That's probaby my favorite part--if I had to pick one. Incredible imagery--for starters--and beautiful symmetry for such a long poem. Bravo! -Tyler |
| Luna Turner 2007-07-26 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful peice. It's like a masterpeice painting. Great job. ~midnightjoy |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-07-20 ch 1, | abuseThis has an out of body philosophical lean to it that engulfs the reader in another realm of thought, and of scene. The easy flow and conversational tone truly enhances the otherworldly feel of this. Very thought provoking, and creative. Great write. MD:77. |
| concerto49 2007-07-16 ch 1, | abuseBlinded in our own world - little world, and short-perspective, we really don't seem much of anywhere else and anything else. Yes, it's good to realize that there is a bigger world, and more above us. It will be alright too. Cool. |
| jojoba-music-girl 2007-07-16 ch 1, | abuseI like the way you ended this very positively! You really made a clear point, yet not too clear. This makes you think yourself, but isn't too..foggy. Maybe this is a bit weirdly said, but I hope you get my point. Amazing poem, it'll go into my favourites! [jojoba-music-girl] |
| Ramenluver 2007-07-10 ch 1, | abuseI like how you said "With the voice of a dying leaf". ^_^Uber good.^_^ |
| a bitter kiss. 2007-07-08 ch 1, | abuseOh wow, I'm in awe. Believe me, I can't write a poem to save my life, so when I'm in awe, I'm in fricking awe. This was an amazing poem! |
| a silenced revolution 2007-07-06 ch 1, | abuseAll of your work that I've read so far has been beautiful, but I think this is one of my favourites. I love poems where connections are made between the stars and night sky in general and life on Earth. If written well, it always seems compelling to me, and of course this is marvelously written as always. *adding to favourites* Keep writing!! |