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| Volurin 2008-06-12 ch 6,  | abuseNice. I really appreciated the storyline. Keep writing, yeah. |
| All The Rest 2008-06-01 ch 6, | abuseI am in tears...absolutely drenching myself. Why must it end badly always? *continues to sob* It was so heart wrenching. I give you my congratulations, and a very heartfelt one at that. This was excellent. |
| Carmel March 2007-07-27 ch 6, | abuseThis is a truly wonderful story. Your descriptions are fantastic, and let the reader see into the world you've created. I like the way you use dialogue; it's realistic and flows naturally. And the storyline is creative, keeps the reader interested throughout the entire read. Like I said, truly wonderful. Good job on this :) I'll be on the lookout for more from you. ~carm~ |
| Alix.Natalie 2007-07-11 ch 6, | abuseI am overwhelmed with tears right now...it was SO touching. It's beautiful! |
| Alix.Natalie 2007-07-11 ch 5, | abuseI like that kid. Aren't HER eyes supposed to be green? In one paragraph you mention her eyes as blue: "Kara soon began spooning the food into Corby’s mouth, her blue eyes glowing with warmth and her caring nature evident as she tenderly fed the man, brushing his hair away every so often. As the bowl was emptied, Kara set about getting him more blankets, the small one she provided for him barely covering his shoulders." |
| Alix.Natalie 2007-07-11 ch 4, | abuseThe tears were there, and the anger. Very nice job. |
| Alix.Natalie 2007-07-11 ch 3, | abuseMy god. How can a HEALER have such a closed off heart and mind? People like that in the real world disgust me, but I guess I can't blame their own personal opinions... But I'm straying from the real topic here...nothing much to say except the what I've already mentioned in earlier reviews. I'm looking forward to sharing the anger with Kara in the following chapter. |
| Alix.Natalie 2007-07-11 ch 2, | abuseOh. So it's a small village in the coast of Japan. Well, about the chapter, I pretty much like your stile of writting, very descriptive, and I can feel the pain Corby is going through, also, nice job on the appearances and facial expressions. |
| Alix.Natalie 2007-07-11 ch 1, | abuseThis is interesting...is it set in older times, or her village simply secluded and one of not too many that are still unafected by modern technology? |
| blondiexoxo 2007-07-07 ch 6, | abuseaw i really loved it |
| Eternity's Ink 2007-07-07 ch 6, | abuse*sobs uncontrollably* beautiful... depressing... *sob* wonderful ending. about how old was Corby supposed to be/look ... sometimes you called him a man other times a boy... just curious. *wipes a tear* |
| Eternity's Ink 2007-07-06 ch 4, | abusegreat chapter! I hate the towns people now, they are so heartless! Poor Corby (great name, too, I don't think I ever mentioned that). . . I love him now that he has a little more spunk. lol. update soon! |
| Eternity's Ink 2007-07-05 ch 1, | abuseWow. Very interesting... I really want to see how this progresses! Update soon! |