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| Selverwulf 2008-08-11 ch 1,  | abuseI loved the odd rhyming here and there. This poem expressed the emotions of betrayal, abandonment and being forgotten about this person who went off to college. I can defiantely relate with this poem, the only difference is that they were never my writing partners. The description and rhyming in the poem helped with expressing these emotions very well. Selverwulf Member of Reviewers Kingdom |
| jekodama 2008-07-15 ch 1, | abuseHm... I didn't quite like it. There's something about the flow that throws me off. There's no sense of rhythm, no cadence, and I think that some of your other works are way better than this one. Although (because it can't all be bad) there was a pretty image here: "It would be a waste of time to compare an apple with an orange". I'm sorry to be the black cloud! Gomen nasai! |
| Thrice 2007-07-05 ch 1, | abuseGreat job there... Friccin wicked |
| Ariel of Wonderland 2007-07-05 ch 1, | abuseWow. Wow. Wow. Wow. I love this. I seriously freaking love this. Great job here, love. Keep writing! (Pleasepleaseplease.) |