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| Kira's Song 2007-07-06 ch 1,  | abuseIt's a decent poem, but remember to add apostrophes in your contractions! You repeatedly wrote "wont" for "won't" and I think you had a "lets" somewhere in there, too. Don't end your sentences in prepositions, either -- "I no longer want to" -- unless it's a modern dialogue. In poetry and in speech, ending sentences in preposition makes your speech choppy, not to mention unrefined. "Our friends is done and over" -- do you mean to say "friendship"? "I wont ever will" -- this is wrong. "Won't" is "will not," so you don't need "will" at the end of the phrase. "Be," however, fits and is correct. -Cristina |