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| luneress 2007-11-24 ch 1,  | abusewow! this sounds really good. sorry to hear u took it down. can't wait to read it! |
| Greekfire 2007-09-07 ch 1, | abuseI hope your fixing. Because this sucked. Really bad. Also, noticed how the evil lady's daughter watches? Tell us, we really need to be told rather than visualize an elf (cliche upon cliche!) getting slain. Protip: Show, not tell! It makes cliches look less like crap. Distraction, mostly. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-08-13 ch 27, | abuseOoh! I like the way this story is going so far! I would write a longer review but I have other things to do. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-08-13 ch 26, | abuseOkay, so I found out who he was in this chapter! Alright! Tinker has a harsh tongue, a little more than before. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-08-13 ch 25, | abuseHeh, he has an antenna? That's funny. White? I guess I'll see in the next couple of chapters. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-15 ch 24, | abuseThat would hurt, to suddenly grow like that. Now that Tinker is big, it should be interesting. Good chapter. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-15 ch 23, | abuseOh dear, they took Tinker and Bella! That's not good. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-13 ch 22, | abuseOh! This sounds like it's going to be interesting. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-13 ch 21, | abuseWell, that sucks. Great chapter! Off to read more. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-13 ch 20, | abuseHeh, he was talking to a pixie...oops. Good chapter. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-12 ch 19, | abuseI don't know why but I laughed at this: “But then what does it mean for me to rise from my ashes? Do I die?” |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-12 ch 18, | abuseI hate it when people finish each other's sentences. It creeps me out. Good chapter. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-11 ch 17, | abuseOh, wow. What happened? I am curious. Good chapter. |
| Disenchanted Words 2007-07-11 ch 16, | abuseGreat chapter. I like how intense the Goddess is with her training. |
| Ember Swish 2007-07-10 ch 15, | abuseGreat chpter! goodness, Alhmah is gumpy! Haha, can't wait till the next chapter. Still a few spacing problems, but not half as much as before. |