This is... really freaking good. The slight repetition near the end is just right; it reiterates the point without being too redundant.

Just... really really good.

Sent shivers down my spine. The ending is so powerful. And unexpected; from the way the beginning goes, you'd never expect that from the end.

But I love it nonetheless.

Felicia.

Very interesting and creative, I see you have a lot of talent. I DO suggest using capitlization(sp?) and punctuation it makes the read much more enjoyable. Loved it nonetheless!

poor horses. i have never liked carisouls