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XVampireXQueenX 2008-05-15 ch 32,	abuseA really, really good read. You have obvously thought of the pyscological reasons behind people's actions and have made people very real. They often react differently than one would expect and you have expaned the story by not only talking about David and Caroline, but also about Case and Erica and Mona. Very very powerful story, and a very intersting message about God. I really hope it gets published, it's really worth it. ~Lillie
Heaven's Dragon 2008-05-09 ch 32,	abuseYAY! Caroline's a mother! And David convinced her to talk to her dad finally! And the ending was so sweet too. Anyway, looks like I'll have to keep an eye out for the sequel. I'll be waiting!
Agent Firefly 2008-05-08 ch 32,	abuseAww I love it. :) The ending almost seemed a little like foreshadowing, though, or I could just be imagining it...? Way to go on finishing this story, you really seemed to move through the chapters quickly toward the end. This was a great story, definitely one of my favorites. Wonderful job.
lux perpetua 2008-05-06 ch 32,	abuseinteresting ending... looking forward to the sequel (nice ending on that cool note)
XVampireXQueenX 2008-05-04 ch 7,	abuseReally good story so far!! Can't wait to finish it!
Agent Firefly 2008-05-03 ch 31,	abuseI can't believe the wedding's finally here! I liked how you switched back and forth from the present to show what has happened in the meantime. This was a well-written chapter. And of course quite sentimental... :) Yay, Caroline Barringer...
Heaven's Dragon 2008-05-03 ch 31,	abuseYAY! We finally got the wedding! And it's not too overdone like some I've read. I've come to the conclusion that wedding scenes are hard to write, but this one was great. And thanks again for the kudos. Anyway, I'll be looking forward to the epilogue, even if it means the end.
abba12 2008-05-03 ch 31,	abuseNO, it can't be over! please! lol ive been folowing this story for a long time now, and its one of the first really good ones ive found on this site, and its actually realistic which is a nice change, theres none of this 'oh, well i forgive you for doing that daddy, come to my wedding' stuff in most christian stories. yes, forgivness is important, but it dosent mean inviting the person back into your life. and actually finding a christian story not based in the conservative church dream world, or the evil satan-run hell on earth is awsome. I can't wait for the sequal!
lux perpetua 2008-05-03 ch 31,	abusei really liked this chapter! aw. i was just at a cousin's wedding over the weekend. awesomeness. (and yes, that 1 corinthians reading is the best! john used 1 john, though. naturally.) one suggestion for future editing would be to watch your transitions from flashbacks to present (the wedding). maybe trying to keep your flashbacks in separate sections (the kind that you marked off with 0's) would help keep things straight for your readers. Luckily, though, that's a matter of cutting and pasting. Looking forward to the epilogue!
Agent Firefly 2008-04-30 ch 30,	abuseI can't believe it's so close to the end! I'm glad you've come so far with this story. Whenever Caroline was nervous about cooking and cleaning I was thinking, "Aw no, Caroline, David will learn to do all that for you" :)
Agent Firefly 2008-04-30 ch 29,	abuseAw yay
Agent Firefly 2008-04-30 ch 28,	abuseI love how strong of a character Erica has become. I used to hate her guts as much as Caroline did, but now she's one of my favorites. Also love the thoughts at the end of this chapter...
Heaven's Dragon 2008-04-29 ch 30,	abuseAnother great chapter! And I can't believe it's almost over! At least there'll be a sequel, I don't want to see this one end quite yet. I can't wait for the wedding, but I hope David manages to forgive Janelle before then. Doesn't he remember all those verses in the Bible about forgiving someone no matter what they do? Anyway, as always I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
Kenny's Friend 2008-04-28 ch 8,	abuse"...rubbing her still smooth stomach." - hyphenate "still-smooth". However, it seems to me that a woman's stomach doesn't get rough in pregnancy - it just gets bigger. Maybe "still-flat" stomach would fit better. Just a thought. Oh, and Erica's like a different person all of a sudden.
lux perpetua 2008-04-28 ch 30,	abuseanother great chapter... david's cold feet here are very realistic. i especially liked your closing scene - intimate without being skeevy.

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