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| Ammom 2007-09-06 ch 1,  | abuseThat's very despaiting. The ending was especially good, and sadly, the poem reminds me of my friend caught up in a struggle with her parents. |
| XxXKristie marieXxX 2007-07-11 ch 1, | abuseOk, I love this!! I can totally relate. My parents are liked this. Always holding me back and sometimes I give up or 'lost my will' as you say. Very nice work!! Kristie Marie |
| Fading Memories 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abuseI was reading the other review and I agree that the first paragraph was definitely different, as if it was part of another poem or something. I like the whole thing, though, it's so sad and painful, but beautiful nonetheless! Great work! |
| fairytale failure 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abuseThe first stanza is really stunning. I loved the words you used, such as 'wet dewdrops on harlequin grass'. The rest of the poem didn't stand out quite as sharply, but I liked the comparision you used, that she is like a caterpillar. |