That's very despaiting. The ending was especially good, and sadly, the poem reminds me of my friend caught up in a struggle with her parents.

Ok, I love this! I can totally relate. My parents are liked this. Always holding me back and sometimes I give up or 'lost my will' as you say. Very nice work!

Kristie Marie

I was reading the other review and I agree that the first paragraph was definitely different, as if it was part of another poem or something. I like the whole thing, though, it's so sad and painful, but beautiful nonetheless! Great work!

The first stanza is really stunning. I loved the words you used, such as 'wet dewdrops on harlequin grass'.

The rest of the poem didn't stand out quite as sharply, but I liked the comparision you used, that she is like a caterpillar.