 Fractured Illusion 2007-07-15 . chapter 1This was beautiful. Although I myself know very little of what I assume to be Greek mythology, their love and past was nicely presented and I liked how you played with your descriptions.
"His hair was unforgivably shaggy, " is a particular favourite line.
Ending was was beautiful as well. But I got lost in the sea of names sometimes, which is a drawback.
Good work! Keep on writing! |