Fabulous! This looks like it's going to be a very good story! I especially like Liam, he seems so sweet!

In general your writing is beautiful and very well developed. The only thing that you might want to work on is varying the length of your sentences a tad more. The only reason I noticed was because I struggle with the same problem myself. Like me, you tend to use a lot of long sentences which can be tiring to the reader. They may not know why, but they start feeling "tangled". The best way to remedy this, that I've found, is to cut what information really isn't necessary (I know, it's hard!) and sprinkle short and medium length sentences throughout.

Great work and Keep Writing!
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