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| Rock on an Ocean Shore 2007-07-29 ch 2,  | abuseAh, so this was a flashback? It explained a lot about Aiko and Syd's family. There were a couple of grammar mistakes (such as writing "i" instead of "I", etc.). Also, the jarring capitals and bold kind of detracted from the writing. I liked that Syd didn't cut. It seems more genuine that he had accidentally thrown away the razor. Cool chapter. Update soon? :D |
| Rock on an Ocean Shore 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abuseD: The last line was astounding. Brought everything together perfectly. I love the characterizations. Please update soon? :) |
| as beauty dies 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abuseThis is amazing. The ending line is so strong and-- Thank-you. Thank-you very much. ^__^ - Noelle |