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| jeygurl86 2008-08-20 ch 9,  | abuseOk, it had been a long time since I had a chance to read the story. So I decided tonight to start from the beginning and see what you have done with the story. I have reviewed you story at least once, so I decided to review it again. From what I remember the story has gotten better since the first time I have read it. I can actually see myself there in the story. My only comment is to add the family into the story more. And to do more with the wedding. Other than that, the story is VERY good and I can't wait for more chapters. |
| Carmel March 2008-07-11 ch 9, | abuseHooray for inspiration! This was a wonderful chapter :) I got right back into the story after the first few paragraphs. Hope to see more from you soon! ~Carm~ |
| vicieanime 2008-06-29 ch 2, | abuseYour japanese is horibble, but it was a nice try. sister in japanese is - nee(chan) or san, sama, kun. Amazinf is- sugoi, or sugei Just wanted to help u out. talk to me is u need help with translations. |
| wingedsoul007 2008-06-27 ch 9, | abuseOh no! Why does he care if he should have done it or not! I thought he was a heartless bastard! Come back green-eyed god! Lolz. Anyway, update soon please! Happy writing! |
| Carmel March 2007-09-04 ch 7, | abuseYet another fantastic chapter :) I'm so sorry for taking so long to review, but I'm so incredibly busy it's hard to even get a chance to check my email. Keep up the amazing work, and update soon! ~Carm~ |
| cherry617 2007-08-19 ch 6, | abuseupdate as soon as you can! with longer chapters. |
| cobraqueen17 2007-08-19 ch 6, | abuseMake her stand up to him. I mean its funny the way she acts but it also...frustraiting too. |
| Megan.S.Lox 2007-08-19 ch 6, | abuseLMAO OMG this is so funny please update soon! |
| Carmel March 2007-08-19 ch 6, | abuseLovely chapter. I'm really liking the direction this story is going in. Update soon! You've got me hooked :) ~Carm~ |
| Carmel March 2007-08-14 ch 5, | abuseWonderful, wonderful story. I love this! You've got interesting, likable characters, a clever storyline, and a great style of writing. I can't wait for more of this :) ~Carm~ |
| cobraqueen17 2007-07-30 ch 5, | abuseIf that was me first I would make a few more keys. But the next time I saw him oh would he be in for it. By the way loved the freedom thing. |
| Boo123 2007-07-30 ch 1, | abusegreat story! |
| Boo123 2007-07-28 ch 4, | abuseomg such a good story!! put more lemon into it though! |
| wonderingwinters 2007-07-27 ch 1, | abusei love this story, but please have someone reread it because eventhough its written well there are many small mistakes that are easy to make. Such as, strait instead of straight... dew instead of dew... so they come up as real words on spell check. I really do love this story and am excited to read more. |
| kiki 2007-07-13 ch 3, anon. | abuseI like first-person point of view. It lets me know what they are thinking and stuff. In other words, It puts me in their shoes. looking forward to the next update! |