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| AlphaNess 2008-05-14 ch 1,  | abuseFirst thing to say... LOL I'm not one to support incest, but damn that was funny :) Poor Pamelton though :( I like this comedy, which is far more funny than it is Tradgedy. Now for criticsm, I spotted one thing I couldn't quite pick up. "By then had given it up, but it was too late." What does that mean exactly? I'm not sure but maybe you should add a 'He to it" or something? I also think you spelt 'Anonymous' wrong, but it may be another way of spelling it, or I just don't know. Anyway awsome read! Going to Author alert list. |
| Hermia Alcott 2007-07-17 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is so awesome, I love it! It's weird and odd and random, but it still tells a story and still makes sense in a weird sort of way. Like in dreams, when you see and do lots of different things but when you try to explain them to people they don't make sense. But this does make sense, and is a fun read, up til the end, which was depressing. But the actual ending was good. I love it when people die for no reason right at the ends of stories xD |
| Captain Cadaver 2007-07-10 ch 1, | abuseThis, my friend, is the most interesting thing I've ever read. The choice of words, and the way things are discribed make this entire story almost dreamlike. Where things only make sense if you're using dream logic. Like, when you actually think about the words and the way everything is put together, it shouldn't make sense at all. But it seems some part of your subconscious mind recognizes it and make sense of it for you. I love it. It's so morbid and it makes what skin I have left crawl, in the best way possible. -CC |