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Fractured Illusion 2007-07-26 . chapter 2
"A thought dawned on hi that"
him, I think you meant

"sometime around 3:00/"
What's with the / ?

Anyhow, what I wonder is; if he is so attractive/decent looking, why hasn't he developed more in the area of talking to people? Why did he turn into an introvert despite the fact that his looks could get him people close to him?

And ack, no more paranoia over the newspaper. Ah well, later chapters will probably reveal more.

Good so far!
Fractured Illusion 2007-07-26 . chapter 1
Interesting concept so far, and the main character seems really dull (in a good way though. I wasn't bored by him, though I am sure I would if I met him in real life :P)

But where is he? Japanese trees but a western name? *confused*
m.t.Skellington 2007-07-24 . chapter 1
Oh dear me, these poor Sanus's just can't get a break...they're all so neurotic. I love the description of his monotonous day to day life and his love for darts--it's the little stuff that counts! =]
I'd like to read more and see what happens, if such is in the offing.
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