Good story, it is a few things that culd have been better but, hey! it´s only my opinion ;P

i was so fu- uh, frigging nervous! i thought she was going to jump! you are really a talented writer! yay 4 u!

I read the whole story, and I must say, I was a little disapointed. The plot idea was good, but there was a little too much dialogue and not enough "in-betweens" or descriptions of the moments and thoughts spent by the characters.

Overall, I found the story a little superficial, but not in the cliched way where superficial means something completly else.

I found it...not deep. Shallow when it came to the character's feelings.

It's like when you go to a stranger's wedding. You know nothing about them except that they love each other becasue they are going through with marriage, but you didn't live through their romance, you weren't there when they first met, or when they first realized they were falling in love. The only thing you know is that, apparently, they love each other, you know nothing else, so how can you be expected to actually FEEL happy for them, or cry at their wedding?

Do you get it? I KNOW they love each other. I KNOW the circumstances they've been through, but the writting wasn't enough to reach me and actually make me FEEL the hate, the agony, the love...

I would work on that aspect of your writting more.

This was pretty cliche, but it had intensity
Good

This was amazing, i loved the scene on the building *sobs* this story's now on my favorite story list =D
Love, Me=)