Beautiful description/word choice - it has a sense of eeriness to it. Nice!

I like the contrasting nature of the wordplay in this. Very thought provoking. Well done. MD:77.

While reading this, I'm reminded by a song I used to hear from my brother's stereo. I like this, it makes me wanna sing my favorite song. Good job!

-C.N

Awesome! Every word was beautiful and well written. I really like it! Fantastic job!

I love the way you've worded this piece. Very well written. I'm having a terrible time deciding which line is my favorite... They're all amazing! Great work with this piece!

I like the image of drowning you paint in the first line. Great haiku!