Hi Tyrammafar,

Nice action in the beginning... I was a little confused at first at ther werewolf, because he was acting human. Maybe you could say that she noticed something different about it... just a suggestion to clear things up. :)

Things happen really fast in the story. I would like to know a little more about a lot of the characters... maybe you could spend a little more time on each development.

On to the next chapter,

Rosefaerie

Wow, another great story!

Good job again... I like the shape shifter. His personality is perfet, he needed to have strong emotions.

On to the next chapter,

Rosefaerie

Hi,

A few weeks ago, you PMed the Readers account regarding your story. Please post the same message to the YW101 Yahoo! Group; you'll have more chances of letting people know about your story there.

Hope this helps!

Regards,

Readers

Please, post another chapter. I think it's even better than most of the Eragon fanfics that you write.

still going good...this chapter i rather liked a lot because it contained more of the creatures of the city and their strange personalities ( i love comparing different authors views on mythical creatures cuz everyone has a different thought process)...i am beginning to like Drek a lot more too..although Vedren is somewhat shifty...but then again thats his character..Sarah seems nice too although (obviously) very naive to the world of mythical creatures..lol..well i am just gonna go on to the next chapter! (oh and the ending was much better on this chapter)

E

still very good with the right amount of suspense, decription and side characters... however i suggest that you end this particular chapter in a different way as it is almost exactly the same way you ended the other chapter...a different ending will keep the readers wanting more..rather than simply wondering..if you take me meaning...however i did like the whole potion ordeal you came up with...with the fact that she can speak the native language of the city yet hear as if it were english...it keeps the story balanced yet also with a minor twist that could create more problems/action later...overall good job..i look forward to more

E

very good suspense...with good characters and so far a good plot...i can't wait to see what happen next..yet i must wait cuz it is late and i must go...however i shall read the rest and review later..thanks once again for applying to my C2 which has been accepted...well bye for now

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The humor, whether intentional or not, is excellent. Gives an added boost to an already great story. I will be glad to set this story into the C2 for you. don't worry about reviews or such. It took me a whole week to get a least 3 reviews for my leading story... that is until I hit writers block, then they came in the ship loads (ironic no?). I still haven't written a full page yet.

Anyway I will wait impatiently for you next update and am glad that I was one of the first to leave a review. Good luck!