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| as beauty dies 2007-07-12 ch 1,  | abuse[“Alisa, do you want anything to eat?” her mother knocked on her door, asking.] I think you meant: Her mother knocked on her door, asking: "Alisa, do you want anything to eat?" ^^; Anyway, this has a really good plot and some genuinly creepy moment. The whole thing, in all, is well executed and I really like the main-character. Keep up the good work! - Noelle |
| Sweetly Sarcastic 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abuseslighty bizarre, slightly creepy, and short, but a pretty good plot |
| paradiie 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abusewow. intense. |