hey, i'm brett by the way. xD

haha lol, funny how u incorporated fiction press into ur story. bravo. can't wait for the next chapter!

"Things like that only happen on Fictionpress." LOL I love that line. Your story is interesting. Keep up the great writing and UPDATE SOON! :P

Augh, it won't let me review the previous chapter for some reason! Oh well...lol Eaters reminds me of Death Eaters from Harry Potter ^^ Anyways, you took my music quote =D Ah well, anyways keep up the good work and update soon~

oh! it's getting amazing. i love it. especially the FictionPress allusion. it's pretty much crazy. update soon!!

YAY! I like it on to the next chapter

aw phooey :( I'll recommend this to someone :D you have my interest though (brett recommended this ^_^) update soon!

~FoxyWriter

whoa... wonder what happened O.O this is addicting haha a really attention-grabbing chapter lol

~FoxyWriter

o o.o this sounds like anime ^_^ it's really cool, I've never really read this style of reading before (or I have, but it's been a LONG time) it's really great :D

~FoxyWriter

wow - this is interesting! I like how it's written too, and yeah it's weird O.O wonder what's going on *onward to chapter 2* ^_^

~FoxyWriter

OMG no! i love this storey, it's soo good! i'll ask two more people to read and review, but please don't stop it. I'm eager to know what happebs, and you can't expect a 200 peopel audience. I have at least eight stories up (some poetry)but still have hardley anyone read my stuff. u just have to be patient, If i help u out, u help me out. Read my new story "Where the wind takes us" and give me your opinoin, thanks xD. heres the link

i read and review, or at least i have, whenever i get the chance to check my email to see if any stories are updated. i like it so far, even though it's a little bit freaking me out, like reading a horror movie. i do, however, assume that this is the point, so good job!

Aww man you suck xP lol I'll be sure to recommend it to people

lol but I listen to the voices in my head a lot...one is saying to kill you right now because you made a cliffhanger...just kidding!! Or am I?? hahah well off the to next chapter I go

i like ur story so far, update soon!