Eeee I loved it, though I can't give constructive criticism since I read it all in one and am now all happy at the ending .

you should totally write a sequel

Omgaawd you have no idea how much i freakin love this story! Made my day

Wow, great intro! I would go mad if my parents made me do that ...

lol i loved it .. haha screw jennifer its cameron im worried about .. did everyone see him and her together .. sequel ?

Wow. I love this story! It's great and there's something about it that makes it believable in a way. Awesome job, and continue to write amazing stories :)

[BTW; is this story finished or not? Because the ending of chapter 10 seems like it, but it doesn't say 'completed']

Love it so far, update soon!

that was to sweet. GO CAMERON!

So she's more likeable now but at the same time she's pretty hard to like yuou know still I like the charactor more now and I feel sorry for her she just seems sort of trapped great chapter

So all I can think is that, you made Jen pretty unlikable in fact I kind of hate her, but it was well written

So I just read your first chapter of make some noise was that name anyway I liked it, well written and even though it's sort of cliche you've made it original and Jen is likeable charactor that you feel sorry for

This is an interesting story, although the glamorizing of gangs angers me. I live in new york and I know for a fact they are not somthing to be taken lightly. Also, bronx is spelt with an x not a c.

Well, there hasn't been a whole lot of the plot introduced yet, but I think your character sounds very realistic. I like how you chose first person to help readers to get into her mind. Two traits about her that really stuck out to me were that she doesn't understand how other people are as smart as her, and that she doesn't think she's a genius. Both are very realistic.

Nice work :)

i loved it. so awesome. it was funny cuz my name is Jennifer and well i'm really gulible and i'm not really a nerd but i've had may fair share of inteligence. enyway. AWESOME JOB!

They're gonna' give them hell alright!

That was such a great story! I loved it!

It dealt with real-life issues but also was such a romantic story! You did a wonderful job! :D

HC