agh. this would have gotten me to tears if you wrote the scene he died but its still sad. i fucking hate it when people are as happy as fucking this and something happens and they dont even DESERVE it. ... Dx

...

That ending really WAS unnecessary, you know. REALLY.

Wow.
This story is absolutely breath taking. It jerked my heart to one side and threatened to never let go, really.

I didn't expect the angsty ending, whatsoever. It's so beautifully written. Well done.

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Ah! You're horrible! You actually have me, just an innocent reader, loving your mischievous fellah!

The fact that it's written in first person doesn't help. XP

Fantastic piece, Nub. Honestly, can't say I've ever been drawn into a FictionPress piece as strongly as this one. Sure, there's all these little grammar quirks that drive me crazy, but they're easily overlooked.

I even went on myspace and listened to the song I Believe In A Thing Called by The Darkness while reading the shower scene in the first chapter.

A favorite!

Great writing. It made me cry. . .

Well, that wasn't quite what I expected! It started out so happy and cute! I liked the ending though, it was different. That was pretty good, though sad.

D: I`m not liking this "dash of anngst" thing... I loved this one though ;__;

Okay, I admit to not reviewing when I read this one you first posted it. I admit to not adding it as a favorite, as well.

However, regardless of that this story is one of my favorite. When I first read it, I was shocked by the ending and thinking how painful it must've been. Reading it now, I realize just how painful it really could be.

I guess what I want to say is that after nearly a year, the meaning in your story has changed for me. The one thing that hasn't changed is how well written it is. I loved it then and I love it even more now (and I'll finally do it justice by adding it as a favorite).

Oh Christ, I did not expect that ending. Shows how little I pay attention - I guess I'm all about the summary 'cause I just now checked the category and, obviously, it's "Romance/Angst." How sad. They didn't even get to have sex. I know that makes me seem shallow, but I'd be pissed if I was "saving myself for marriage" and then my fiancee died. See, that's why Andrew Marvell and Robert Herrick and etc. were right.
I love this idea, "we get our own divine eternity in little moments like these."

I really would have liked to say that I hated this story. I dislike (read: hate with a passion) angsty endings and this one came out of nowhere! -whines-

But alas, the prose is too good for me to not like it. So I do.

...stop gloating.

Favorite line:

"My brain doesn’t work because my heart is in the driver’s seat."

I'm going to ignore the death(s). In my deluded little mind, they LIVE happily ever after. So nyah.

Good work though. Keep writing.

-Bleep

dude. that was like a freakin' sucker punch. i should have known it was coming. i mean, you did say 'angst' in the summary and i kept looking for it in all the fluff...but that was like dropping an anvil of angst on my unsuspecting head.

but! i really liked it. very strong emotionally, which made the ending all the more visceral, and plausible, in my mind. nicely done. :)

Oh my god! That wasn´t fair! ;__; It was so happy and fluffy at first and then BAM! It just wasn´t anymore... :( Great though! Keep it up!