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| Lady L 2007-08-21 ch 1,  | abusesensual adn rythum filled...much like the Tango? i see why you call it 'Dance'...i think...? i must say, this is one of my favorite of your many pieces. you are with your words as a Maticulious Midas is when counting his gold...i say this to mean:there is a maticulious beauty to it...a tender slavery. :) |
| RP Nixy 2007-07-20 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. Nice tone, great rhthym and an almost perfect count. Great closure, you've got the order logical and easy to follow. Few gramatical errors though, you need to look out for those, as great as it is, something tells the best is still to come...there's one i havent seen yet |