Wow, I don't know what to say about your story. Simply that I loved it! Yes it is gory and very descriptive, but I love it. It's one of the most beautiful stories that I've read. Love the work and I hope that you write more to this story! ^_^

Keto, I love the story, but why did you leave it off there? If you don't finish the story I will be very upset with you. ;) It's to good for you not to finish. I love your writing style and I can't wait to read more of what you wrote.

All I can say is...wow. I've always been impressed with your vivid description. Just when I can't imagine you writing anything more gorey, you prove me wrong.

Interesting concept so far...I have to say I like it. The eye part made me cringe literally (I'm so sensitive in the eyes). I'm interested to see where you take this.

Found 1 little mistake in this sentence:
I mean, no 'on' (one) judges a freak at a circus.

Wow...I have to say, what a piece! So full of emotions and descriptions...so colorful in a way that it invokes feelings when I was reading it. I'm known as being cold when reading sad or happy stories, but this made my heart wrenched. I have a long way to go before I can write something like yours. My works lack emotions in them ^_^