Oh, so sweet! I loved it! It'll go in my favorites! A nice setup and a truly beautful message! I miss your rhyming, but your words were beautiful, so it's okay.
Keep at it!
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I liked how you portrayed your feelings and how you started and ended the poem with the same sentence. The only thing I miss is your wonderful rhyming. Other than that, your setup was nice and your words were beautiful.
Keep at it!
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Again, nice repetitions and a nice message! Mostly, I liked your setup but for one sentence that was a little hard to read:
"But, she is a woman, who has simply"
The commas are fine, but it's the parting of the sentence that makes it hard to read. I think that you should've taken others means of shortening the sentence, without it sounding so stakato.
Please know that I mean none of this in a bad way. You're an excellent writer!
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I liked how you put another language in the story, so that it made it unique for this! I liked how you set your sentences and how you portrayed the feelings with those nice descriptions. liked your repetitions, adding to the tune of the poem/short story. Smiles. This was a nice piece!
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You're published!? Wow, that's so cool!

I really liked this, and how you wrote the feelings of loneliness and longing by portraying a stamp. I liked how you repeated one sentence through the poem; it gave it a nice rythm that made it more enjoyable! I liked how you expressed the hope as well, all through that stamp.
This will go in my favorites! Keep at it and write more!
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The idea behind the poem is fantastic. I especially like the line 'not from nights, but days.'

The problem is that the poem doesn't flow well. There is no rhyme scheme and, far more importantly, no meter to hold the piece together. Without that it just reads like disconnected prose.

I wish you luck in this revision.

-Lucien of the Review Marathon (see link in profile)

I liked this! The mystiqe way you portrait your feelings and the depth of it is remarkable! The words you use are powerful, and you give me a really good picture of what you mean.
This poem is good! Keep at it!
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What's "sa voix" mean? It sounds so lovely...

I was scrolling thru as I read and was all like, "No, wait! DOn't be finshed NOW!"





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Oh, darling; you've had better than this (not to say this wasn't fantasmic by any means, of course). My favorite lines were

"One blue jay postage stamp

Can bring together two separated brothers

Who thought one another dead".

And you know what I thought of? "If Walls Could Talk", from HGTV.


Don't laugh.




o.O

Reminds me of a REAL dream, for whatever reason.





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This is practically haunting, I like it so much! I probably would understand it more if I knew the French lol, but the French helps make it fantastic! I love the repetition of "back and forth"...
Ah so good

I remember this poem from Writer's Guild! good times :]

i like how the back and forth fit the rhythm of the poem really well
i wish i understood the french lines
but its still very pretty

i love geneva! its so symbolic
especiaily like "one blue jay postage stamp, attached to a letter, lying on the attic floor"

dream catcher = amazing. =]