Wow, I loved everything. The imagery, the metaphors...even the fact that it was written in paragraph form rather than in stanzas. You portrayed your emotions excellently. Incredible...for a lack of better words. My mind is officially blown. *applause*

Oh my! This is so sad! The last few lines I just wanted to break out in tears! Great job!

love it, as I did before. not a helpful critique, but I really like it.