this is a really well written piece! it shows how horriblely love can change someone...
=summerdazed=

Wow this was so sad but the imagery was amazing.

The first line was a nice start. Apt description of the results of abuse, and the motif of it being a routine event of the day seems interesting. However, describing it as a chaotic "storm" "whirling flurry" seems to add too much of a violent, physical nature to the abuse. A more emotional and suspenseful/surreal approach may uncover the inner darkness of human nature in the husband. Perhaps irony can be used (e.g. contrasting cause & effect) to question the idea of love.

Great job anyways. :P Haven't seen you posted in AGES xD Oh and saying a HAPPY BIRTHDAY to px too (:

wah i love it!
very very good job!