oh man, i have to be honest.. it was the title that caught my eye because i was listening to the relient k cd.

sad story, I honestly prefer stories that aren't "first person experience" (i really dont know if that makes sense)
but i liked it. i really would like to see what would happen next.

Oh Man, that was ** awesome. Rory-named people always win.

He was stupid at the end for doing that, though. It always ends up that way when someone does stupid ** like that, and he was very selfish for doing so. Poor Caroline. Brilliant characters, though. Very, very nice. I hope you use them again.

Rory! haha lol. Not my Rory or Carrie's Rory, but your own lol. Make her read this.

That was really terrible lol (not the writing...just what happened in the story). Reminded me of Romeo and Juliet because that's exactly what happened haha.

Rory's an idiot for doing that.

The only thing this story is missing is some dialog lol.

And also, I listened to the song while I read it. I liked the song, but it distracted me from reading so I had to wait until it was over to finish reading lol.

Will you ever update?

I did like this story though it was sad at the end and a bit predictable that Caroline would try kill her self, I thought Rory might die too to be with her in heaven if she died, I don't know if she does or not it's not clear if she's dead or just unconscious trying to die but obviously he didn't. As for new stories if you want to write more with these 2 by all means go for it.

Oh, man. That ending killed me. Very well done, and well written. One suggestion I'd make is to ease into the fake suicide thing a bit more. In the beginning, he sounds like he loves her, sure, but then you just sort of jump to the point where he loves her enough to pretend to die for her. I don't know, it just seemed a bit rushed to me. Otherwise, I really liked it. Favorited! :)

Oh, and thanks. It does help.

This is good. Maybe it was my being foolish, but I didn't expect the ending. While I think it would be silly to do something like that, you made it seem realistic within the story.

I didn't notice any tense problems that jerked me out of the story. I was rather busy focusing on the content, however, so I might have missed some. The story pulled me in and didn't let go until the end.