The title got me. very mystifying alone, i like it much ^^
It seemed pretty interesting at first, but then all the info kinda just crawled on and on. just a suggestion: ppl don't really enjoy reading continous paragraphs of information. it's definietely interesting stuff and the reader definitely needs to know it all, but maybe there's a way you can incorporate all that info into the story itself?? you could even have the two boys playing on a playground and talking/acting in a way that would give us a good sense of their personalities. idk, just a thought ;)
the rest seems pretty interesting itself, though!! i'd like to see what happens next :)

Sweet! This looks like a good story so far. But it's kind of wordy in the beginning...I got a little confused. It's sometimes easier to understand when the characters explain parts of the story through dialogue rather than explain everything through narration.

I really like it! Keep it up! ^_^ I can't wait to read the next chapter!

(It's my turn to ask now lol) How do you pronounce Xzeander, Chriise, and Chem?

well, i thoguht this was good. it was very info heavy in the beginning. update soon