I love this, you inspire me at every turn.

When you speak of rivals being someone that you can go to, I can relate to that. A rival and an enemy are two different things, something that people forget more often than not.

I know what it's like to get so lost in something that you forget why you're doing it. Sometimes you need someone to give you a bitchslap and tell you that you've gone off the deep end.

But it gets tiring when you can't pull the person back.

Well either way, I loved this, I know. Surprise, surprise.

It seems we disagree quite a lot in this poem (we also agree on some points). For starters, we have a different definition for what a rival is and means. While I completely agree that rivals should inspire one another, I don't think that thanking or teaching the other quite falls into that kind of relationship. Yes, there can be friends that at the same time have a rivalry on some field, be it academic, social or other, but that isn't always the case. My biggest rival is a man that I'd love to see hanging from his *, and I don't think there would be any situation in which he would do something that required me thanking him (and even if it were the case, I probably would beat him dead after doing it). Anyways, I'm rambling too much, and while I still liked your poem very much, I disagree with it.

Hey!

It's me again! Lol. =)

I really like this poem of yours. If it's a poem cause I'm really not sure since it's under fiction. Hehe. :p Anyway, to start the review...I really like hoe you were able to show a different perspective to 'rivals' - a more optimistic side and how a rival, instead of bring you down, can be a good thing.

I also like the way in how you were able to deliver a lot in such few words. You gave use the benefits of having a rival and tersely explained each one. Here's an example...

The purpose of a rival is to make you think, (benefit)

Of things that you’ve either overlooked, or just didn’t see. (explanation)

Lol. I hope you get what I'm trying to say. Haha! =D

Anyway, that's all I want to say. Keep up the great work and the best of luck to you!

- Songs of an Angel

nice one

You definitely came off irritated in this. It's obvious you were finished. As to being rivals and understanding each other, that is an important key to any friendship or relationship.

I think you made your words and emotions quite clear.

I saw a small mistake though, if you don't mind me pointing it out. It was te word hon you spelled it with an e.

Besides that everything else was pretty nice and efficient, and I don't think I need to express myself again.

~Mosaic

You guys were done with whoever said the first goodbye. It doesn't matter if you guys started 'to get each other' again. If one person doesn't return what the other wants then it's hopeless!


I think the poem really stands out otherwise. It's deep and a lot of people can understand that. *huggles* I liked the piece. :D

And just when I thought we finally "got" each other, it is clear that you haven't understood a goddamn word I've said.

Whatever. I'm done. Clearly, we both are.