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| Clandestiny 2007-09-09 ch 1, | This story was very good. I can picture everything you describe in the story. If you write more, great, but it's not entirely necessary. It's good as is. |
| Dan Kingsley 2007-07-22 ch 1, | Honestly, there is nothing I can pick apart about the story. Even though, there is no dialogue, you seem to paint the atmosphere, mood, setting and theme through a very convincing use of first person narration. When I now think of it, this is pretty good for one shot. |
| Rainumora 2007-07-17 ch 1, | That was certainly interesting. There were a few similarities here and there to major works of fiction, one being The Matrix and I, Robot another. But, it was a well thought out one-shot. It doesn't need anymore to be added to it, this piece of fiction is perfect the way it is. |
| Ariel S 2007-07-16 ch 1, | It's got a few kinks here and there, but overall it was good. You should continue with the story. It's quirky (And I mean that in a good way), and I'd love to read more sci-fi from you. |