Hehe! This was tres cute! Nicely done, but I'm afraid I don't understand why Brian was 'afraid' of her after she smiled. What is she thinking of doing to him? =D

gulistanlik

Aww. Cute. And a creative way of getting around the "no dialogue" rule.

I really like the texting idea instead of the use of dialogue for the challenge. It all fitted together very nicely, especially the dancing. The only thing that I see that would need a change is the 'up to no good smile' should be ‘up-to-no-good smile.’ Anyway very good.

It was great.

wow, a man who can dance! very romantic...! maybe I should try and complete the challenge as well... what do you think?

the beginning was a little confusing with all the names, but I was reading quickly, so...

Hey there! I just wanted to say that I enjoyed reading this. However, I noticed two things. One, in the beggining you say they are at a "wedding room". I think it should say "waiting room" because they're waiting for Sarah to give birth. Two, the first message she sends to Brian is the prhase required in the challenge and spelled out properly, then she drastically changes her typing manner to short words and numbers, it may be just me (who doesn't really like to abreviate words, lol) but I don't think she would type everything in the first message and then change to two-letter abreviations. Other than that I enjoyed reading the short piece, light and fun.

Hello, it's me again, reviewing for reviewer's found.
Anyway, I like how you used sms messages instead of actual dialogues to meet the requirements of the challenge. Smart ;).
However, I don't really get the first part about Brain's best friend Daniel and his girlfriend Sara, and you didn't mention much about them afterwards either. Hum...
The language in this one-shot is really good as well. Keep up with the metaphores and so on. They really make the whole story seem more vivid.
All in all, this is really sweet and I like it on the whole.
Point made: Write more one-shots!

I love cash

Aw. So cute. :D You did a really good job of making the story move forward without any dialogue. That would be superhard to do. :O

-Sally :D