Yay, talking animals!

Awaiting more goodness!

This last chapter was pretty good. I wouldn't use opened open, but other than that I can't complain.

Very engrossing. There's so much to bite into here, I have a strong need to read more. Excellent for any story, but especially for one with such mysterious characters and landscapes.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

I'm enjoying this quite a bit so far.
There's a great sense of mystery to it; you're not rushing in to blurt out every single detail. Instead your giving hints and taking your time to establish characters. The flow of the story is also very good so please keep at it so i can keep reading.

I love this story. I can't wait till more comes out.

Although you only have two characters at the moment, they are very well constructed and appropriate for their circumstances. Very well done.

Oh, goodness! Well performed, I do say. I think you have the details part basically down, but concerning the dialog? I would say you're not doing that badly.

Your writing is very..intricate and mysterious, if that makes sense. So far, that's what I feel when I read it, mystery, intricacy, and intrigue.

Concerning details, I would only say that maybe, not right now, because with prolouges that's a good thing, but in the future to have more focusing on HER emotions. So far, your doing mighty fine, I should say.

I enjoyed this chapter even more than I did the last. Please proceed.
Night Silver's Whisper

Alright well I just wanted to say that this was a very interesting prologue. It did keep me reading and didn't feel like an info dump like most prologues do. This seems more like a first chapter though, in all honesty.
As I was reading along I found that you missed an "is" in the sentence "That it only appropriate". You know, minor mistake.
Anyway, rolling right along until I was struck several times by the fact that this girl is very numb. This point was hammered home very hard. Another point that was drilled in a little too far was the fact that she was freezing. It might have been ok if more adjectives were used other than the words "freezing" and "cold". Icy is a nice one to try out.
I like the image that she has a silver aura but I'm not really feeling the silver-blue hair. I mean, it's perfectly fine if her hair is this color but again, silver and silver are used in the same paragraph.
I'm also confused when she finds her "skin tinged dangerously blue". It seems, to my little brain, that her prison might have always been this cold or was it the cold that woke her up?
I liked the fact that you used the phrase "icy confinement" that was very good.
Um...let's see I was just wondering if the temprature keeps dropping because she keeps getting colder. Is that her or is it her prison? If she's already freezing I don't think she'd notice one tiny degree drop. Makes me wonder if someone is tampering with the A/C controls outside this egg thing. (It might not be an egg but that's what I'm picturing).
I really liked the fact that these people speak a different language or at least that she didn't understand them right away. Big fan of that.
The last thing is that I found the italicized stuff hard to stick with but that could just be my ADD kicking in.
Good job and I hope you update again soon.
If you want another review, I'd be happy to give you one if you review my story. Again, good job.

Yo there.

This was absolutely wonderful. It was long when I first clicked on it, and I was almost going to leave, but I had to continue. I am glad I did.

I read the summery, and I have to say...of all the summeries i have read on this very large site, I have never found another that gripped my attention as fiercely as yours did mine.

I wait with baited breath for more of your style of the written word!
Night Silver's Whisper

The beginning seems a bit like an info dump. Not too bad, but it was hard for me to get engaged in the story. The part where protagonist hears footsteps outside of the prison caught my attention. I think if you wanted to grab your readers faster, I would cut the first part and start with one grab-sentence from your original beginning and then jump right into the action.

Rest seemed good. Some of the word choice confused me, but I assume it's the characters dialects. Different dialects are cool; I don't see them too often.

Power of the last sentence was good. "But at least I was warm." It works well. Sort of migitates the suffering (I don't know if you were going for that, though).

- JAK
(Please check out my story! :D )