Very nice!
Great story, your a very good writer.
couple of spelling/Grammer mistakes (like some bits are written in slang ect)but other than that, it's well written.
I've read a few horror stories, and this has got to be one of the best shorts i've read, down to it's 'gore' and writing style. And Iv'e gotta thank marc for passing me the URL lol.

Will watch out for any more ya post on - an will add ya to Fav authers - and if you want summat to read you might like one of mine called 'silent dreamer', as your beginning is written in almost the same style that uses =).

all the best, bex x

Your first every story here on FictionPress =]

You already know what I think of it, I love it. It's well written, you keep the suspense and mystery all in tune and manage to pull off a great first story.

Keep up the good work and I can't wait for your new stuff.

Marc