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| english summer rain 2008-07-05 ch 1,  | abusedamn, i'm a sucker for peter pan fics. can't say much, i'm afraid after i judge this with words, i'll bring it down to a level that it doesn't deserve. i'm just going to appreciate it's beautiful simplicity (oops, it just slipped :O). love this so much. |
| Alicia Marianne 2007-11-15 ch 1, anon. | abusei love how you take something as innocent as peter pan and tinkerbell and turn it into something so heart-breaking. |
| Stella Grimshaw. 2007-10-10 ch 1, | abuseAnd it's just amazing how you take so many out-of-nowhere subjects and make them relate to everyday things, so amazing. |
| Hometown Stories 2007-09-09 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this a lot. I'm sorry I can't say anything more insightful, but I found the way you did the divisions and enjambment very effective. |
| mizu no kokoro 2007-07-30 ch 1, | abusewow... reminds me of that movie, hook? tinkerbelle had feelings for peter afterall. but this poem was truly elegant. good job keep writing |
| Prevaricate 2007-07-26 ch 1, | abusesuch a classic tragic romance. if only it didn't happen so often. you know, I always read your stuff, and I'm always too lazy to log in and review. I've got to be more ambitious. |
| summerbee 2007-07-19 ch 1, | abuseoh, god. i'm a sucker for peter pan stories. what can i say. i think that splitting the poem's stanzas up with actual numerals works well for this, otherwise it might feel jumpy. also, given that tinkerbelle is generally characterized as 'sassy **, lol' to see her being more tender is also nice. although am i getting too attached to a character that more or less belongs to disney now? i don't know. but this was good. |
| flights.of.fantasy 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abusenever did like tinkerbell so much, but peter pan was the love.i guess he really never wanted to grow up, still stagnant as that hopelessly cruel boy. |
| Not Quite Dry Eyed 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abuseI like this a lot, it's a cute new twist on the old story. I always thought Peter should be with Tink, not that stupid Wendy girl! Great job on this. Keep writing forever and always. Please R&R me sometime Not Quite Dry Eyed |
| love between the radio stat... 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abusedelicious. that's the only word for this. |
| cocaine and cherries 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abuseneverland boys && wonderland girls. we were never meant for love. i love this. |
| Her Wishing Well 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abuseGreat i like the twist on the peter pan characters in a sort of abstracted way. The imagery and language was amazing. |
| Sekhmet Johnson 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abuse'i. but when the stitches of his shadow snap, peter can't catch hold again to save his life. dripping silver shreds of self he turns, and his jaw is weak. he reaches. he says, "please." and oh! tinkerbelle always did have a soft spot for lost boys.' Oh, my. I always did love Peter Pan. Best hero ever >3 Tinkerbell, not so much. The Disney depiction of her annoyed the hell out of me >> But this is brilliant. I never saw tinkerbell[e?] this way. This poem is the pixie's redemption! Fantastic stuff. |
| Aimee Raven 2007-07-18 ch 1, | abuseWow, that's such a great...not to say interpretation, but vision of the tale! I love it! It's great! I'm sorry I have nothing much constructive to say, but I liked it...especially the end. It's a classic boy-girl story, but the way you retold it with Peter Pan and Tinkerbell is awesome!! |