damn, i'm a sucker for peter pan fics. can't say much, i'm afraid after i judge this with words, i'll bring it down to a level that it doesn't deserve. i'm just going to appreciate it's beautiful simplicity (oops, it just slipped :O). love this so much.

i love how you take something as innocent as peter pan and tinkerbell and turn it into something so heart-breaking.

And it's just amazing how you take so many out-of-nowhere subjects and make them relate to everyday things, so amazing.

I really liked this a lot. I'm sorry I can't say anything more insightful, but I found the way you did the divisions and enjambment very effective.

wow... reminds me of that movie, hook? tinkerbelle had feelings for peter afterall. but this poem was truly elegant. good job

keep writing

such a classic tragic romance. if only it didn't happen so often.



you know, I always read your stuff, and I'm always too lazy to log in and review. I've got to be more ambitious.

oh, god. i'm a sucker for peter pan stories. what can i say.

i think that splitting the poem's stanzas up with actual numerals works well for this, otherwise it might feel jumpy. also, given that tinkerbelle is generally characterized as 'sassy **, lol' to see her being more tender is also nice.

although am i getting too attached to a character that more or less belongs to disney now? i don't know. but this was good.

never did like tinkerbell so much, but peter pan was the love.i guess he really never wanted to grow up, still stagnant as that hopelessly cruel boy.

I like this a lot, it's a cute new twist on the old story. I always thought Peter should be with Tink, not that stupid Wendy girl! Great job on this. Keep writing forever and always. Please R&R me sometime

Not Quite Dry Eyed

delicious.

that's the only word for this.

neverland boys && wonderland girls. we were never meant for love. i love this.

Great i like the twist on the peter pan characters in a sort of abstracted way. The imagery and language was amazing.

'i.
but when the stitches of his shadow snap, peter can't
catch hold again to save his life. dripping silver
shreds of self he turns, and his jaw is weak.

he reaches. he says, "please."
and oh! tinkerbelle always did have a soft spot
for lost boys.'

Oh, my.

I always did love Peter Pan. Best hero ever >3
Tinkerbell, not so much. The Disney depiction of her annoyed the hell out of me >>

But this is brilliant. I never saw tinkerbell[e?] this way.

This poem is the pixie's redemption! Fantastic stuff.

Wow, that's such a great...not to say interpretation, but vision of the tale! I love it! It's great! I'm sorry I have nothing much constructive to say, but I liked it...especially the end. It's a classic boy-girl story, but the way you retold it with Peter Pan and Tinkerbell is awesome!!