Wow, I can really feel the anger in this. I gotta say, that guy is probably not so smart to see what he had.

Nice Work

Yusuf

Interesting...I suppose most people can relate to this in some way or another. Nice job.

One suggestion would be to get rid of the swear words. Yes, I know they get the point across quickly and portray emotion, but I just consider them the 'easy way out' so to speak. There are plently of ways to keep the anger there and the same emotion without having to swear.

But that's neither here nor there. Just my opinion on the subject. I myself have been tempted to use swear words in most of my work but found that it makes me think harder and write better when I don't use them.

Arafax

Awesome poem.

Good job!

Have a wonderful day. :)

Twilight Starr

well, that's sad... but I think it's sweet too, I don't know, the poem is good.

ow datz so awsom itz jusst how i fellt lukily mi bf cam bak i luv it! kep rtin!