hi
I think this is so cute! You really know how to express urself!
Keep Smiling LoSt ReMeDy

what the hell is wrong with you?!

konban wa

*sigh* I honestly can't tell you if I loved this poem or hated it because I couldn't even READ it. Please don't take this as a flame; everything I'm about to say is pureply for you to improve your writing skills (if you choose to accept the criticism).

First -- and most cardinal rule in writing -- don't misspell! There is absolutely no reason for there to be typos in anything you write, thanks to the wonderful invention of spell check! Even if you don't have spell check, it's not so difficult to read over your own work and correct it. Or send it to someone to correct for you.

What's worse, though, is that you actually wrote like this on purpose. The way you talk to your friends online is NOT the way you should be writing a poem and/or story and/or essay, etc. There is absolutely no excuse for such writing in something other than AOL or whatever I.M. *thing* you use.

I really have nothing more to say for this because I can't discuss the content -- to do that I'd have to first READ the poem, which is impossible.

Zaijen
-Shan-

dis peom wuz rly good, lyk serouisly i dun no wut dose other ppl were talkin bout!! dis makes my hart sadd!! its soo diskriptive and emoshunal and wundrfull && it rimes 2!! gud job!!1

also its a gud thing u explaned in teh summari bout the starz bc i thoght u ment paris hiltin n i was lyk nuh-uh, i totalli saw a pic of her cryin on tmz!! lolz!!11

No.

Absolutely not. This is not writing. This is chatterspeak on steroids with a side order of every hallucinogen you can think of.

What the hell was that? Not literature, surely. You must be joking.
~Thursday

It'd be better if you wrote it properly, rather than like a dyslexic stool sample.

I'd love to read something by you written in English.

A shame indeed,

Alan.