You did a really good job on this one! The only thing is the first verse says hates, fears, and feels, you left out feels but that also would have made it a bit to long so, other than that i don't have any critisims : )

very good. are you talking about the same person or 2 different people? could be both but i really like the repition great job

M. Great. I really adore how you used repetition in this poem. It really made it an interesting read.

Oh, I really like the way this is written, with the repitition and all. It really pushes the words at you, if that makes sense, and makes you listen. Very good.

Falcon