Why?

god.

ihatechyouu.

Haha, jay kay.

I was expecting this to be a memory, well a memory of what had occured in reality.

And I was anxious to hear what he was going to say and I read the lines:

"I woke up."

:D

kthnxbai,

Martin the Waterkiser

This was kind of sad. . . But written in a very realistic way. Nice work!

- Koki

This was such a wonderful story. I love how you add in some confusion for the character and the reader making them both want to know more. The suspense, heartbreak, and eerie familiarity of the mood of the story was fit to almost perfection.

There was a few grammatical errors I found while reading through, but nothing too horrible. Yes, that is weird to be hearing from me, but with original fiction published in your name with your own rights, I think it should be taken very seriously. :)

Well, I better go read your other story. Then I'll cry all night wondering why your writing skills are so superior to all.

aww... very heartbreaking, all the way through :(

i like how the tension was really nicely played out with the whole scene, progressing towards the main character's breakdown of a cold structure. it was really good how you kept on buoying the reader towards suspense and a climax however i was disappointed when i reached the end and there was no climax. i had read the entire story, hoping for an explanation for what he had done or how he had done it and maybe a resolution, but in the end, there was just a hanger. the ending is rather surprising but maybe you could continue the story a bit more? i would definitely be interested in seeing more.

Hm...very interesting. So...is this unrequeited (sorry if I spelt that wrong) love? Cool...like it...interesting...keep it up.