| Reviews for One Shot |
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TK Anez 7/13/10 . chapter 1I really like this! You are a really good writer and I love the premise of the story. Maybe you could read my story, Ishiki. I'd love to hear your opinion on it :) |
K.D. Collins 10/12/08 . chapter 10...There are no words to describe this story sufficiently, so I won't try. All I can really say is that it was an amazing story, and it defiently deserves a spot on the favorites list. Doc |
UtterChaos247 9/7/08 . chapter 9this story really is great, and if anything it's moving a little fast, i can't believe there's only nine chapters, maybe you could go back and add more detail or w/e to fatten it up a bit *_* i'm glad u updated |
UtterChaos247 2/13/08 . chapter 8all these characters are confusing me... |
Sweet Madeline 1/5/08 . chapter 7It doesn't stink; it's awesome and creative like all the others. But when are you going to update? *pitiful look* |
Sweet Madeline 1/5/08 . chapter 5Oh my gosh, this is terrible! well, not terrible writing.. but I mean.. he's actually KILLED people! two people so far. I mean, I agree that everyone could've been nicer to him... but he shouldn't be killing people.. o.o |
Sweet Madeline 1/5/08 . chapter 4O.O I knew Jacob was going to be the one to snap! Oh goodness, this is getting good! *hits button for next chapter* |
Sweet Madeline 1/5/08 . chapter 3Yikes! still so confusing, but I think I'm keeping things sufficiently straight.. oh, poor Jacob! Why is everyone so mean to him? :( |
Sweet Madeline 1/5/08 . chapter 1"I want you to move back to defense." "But why?" Jake asked, defensively. That part made me giggle. Did you do that on purpose? Anyway, very good! Having a hard time keeping track of the characters though, especially since there's a Mike and Michael, and a Jake and Jacob. *head is spinning* |
Colette Ann 1/1/08 . chapter 1Really good writing. Very good plot. I got confused with who was speaking with the cheerleaders but beyond that it was really good. left me wanting more, good job |
UtterChaos247 10/3/07 . chapter 7ur a great writer..really this is great just a last week some lady came to my school and talked about the something shooting, she was a survivor, ..w/e wat i was gonna say is this is a great story |
blister 7/31/07 . chapter 6This is an excellent idea; the plot is great and it's moving along really well-though it would seem more real if you developed Jacob's character a little more, give the ready more insight as to what he's thinking and feeling. Update soon! |
crushed beauty 7/27/07 . chapter 5I really don't know what to say. This is excellent, I'm completely hooked. I love the style this is written in too, in different perspectives. One mistake though: In chapter one, you introduced Alexandra as Alexandra Carroll, however, before her tragic departure, you wrote Alexandra Costos. Besides for that, keep up the good work. I anticipate the next chapter! |
409962 7/19/07 . chapter 4I'm lovin' this story so far. Can't decide which character is my favourite. They're all pretty interesting to me. And the story is very well written, I just couldn't stop reading it. This is definitely going onto my fave stories list. :D And gah, why did you end chapter four with a cliff hanger? Update soon! I wanna know what happens next! |
drkprinkeswarir 7/19/07 . chapter 4AHH! talk about a perfect cliff hanger! anyway... this is really great. its realistic. i love each of the characters. but whats especially impressive is how you describe the same actions, but through different characters perspectives. its neat to see the same thing in an entirely different way. i like how they've all come together now. what happens next? dont keep us in suspense! |