Sweetie that was beautifully done! The detail was amazing, inspiring. I loved how you mixed your own culture and beliefs into the story. I absolutely love it when authors have that strong connection, when they put that much of themselves into a piece. I already knew you were great, but this blew me away! Great job! I will have to make sure to read the rest of your works here! -Melissa

You described the pain she was in so well, I could even feel it. Good job!