 Geno 2009-09-14 . chapter 1I thought this was pretty good, but I do have a few things to say.
"My sixth sense told me" You might want to add in the word "had"
"And so I did do that" Kill the word "DO", add the word "JUST".
"Right to my own house" Maybe saying "Right back to my house" would be better?
Aside from that there are some other lines that need their sylibles checked and it seems a bit weird that the meatball suddenly had a hat... Oh well, you probably meant it to confuse people. |
 anonymouse13 2008-03-05 . chapter 1That was brilliant. Better than the toothpaste. My crazy swim team friends and I like to sing On Top of Spaghetti, so I'm definitely going to print this out. Then we'll memorize it and have many more verses to drive people crazy with! |
 iLone 2008-02-25 . chapter 1XD SO ** AWESOME!
I don't even know the whole meatball song... it turns into a tree? |
 Tetelestai 2008-01-31 . chapter 1HAHA nicee! This was the perfect thing to cap off my day before going to bed.
Good job. =) |
 FlamingFlie 2007-12-21 . chapter 1HAHAHA... that was really funny... I want a pet meatball.
~ Flamingflie |
 Joanna Johnson 2007-07-23 . chapter 1made me cry! poor meatball! it was good though. i liked it a lot. |