This is a fantastic story, but it is riddled with mistakes in grammar.

At one point you say "here" instead of "hear".

With a little rereading, this story would fix-up nice.

~Trii

OMG Dani esta historia es hermosa!! te juro me encanto, los tios de Luciano no me caian bien hasta ahora!!
De verdad... es tan dulce la historia, aww y el final y todo. Me hizo ver a la mama de Lu de manera diferente tambien!
Como no tan estupida, sino q solo como q cansada de luchar.

Jeje quedo muy buena!

Besotes!

Alright after reading the intro I knew immediately it was Lu and Rob's story. I thought it was great. there were some typos and grammatical issues but nothing too serious. I liked thier story it was really cute and realistic. I never did see the cheat with Nancy coming. I mean I thought it was weird they kissed on the lips not being related but I just assumed Lu was being paranoid. I guess he had great instincts.

Oh I like this! It was beautiful...and I hated Lu for a few minutes in the middle there.
Great Job!

Aw, that really was cute. It was nice to seeLu´s past :D Great job!

:)

That was really good! I was almost crying at some points...

It really comliments Profe and fills in some gaps!

Good work!