BAL UPDATE! It's great, much much better than the last one, I mean the former WLB. Now I get the idea that they know much more about Brad's grandfather. The last one was so vague, and lots of characters were just forgotten... I'm looking forward to your next update, as usual.

WTFOMGWTF happened to all my revies here? Didn't is ay anything!? I HAVE TO START FROM SCRATCH!? >=D Yay.

Anyway, a 4 (or 5 chap) summary. I like the way you titled the chapters, it makes it less confusing and i think you're influenced by Game Of Thrones =_=

(I, Prolouge)

I love this intro compared to the other one. This intro has more emotions and a very graphic imgaery, making the read see what the characters sees. ANd the conversation between the characters feels realistic ^^ The description of the characters are also very good though i must say personally from my feelings, Lance is hell =_= (i hate you for this but i'll put up with it since is so bloody good) All in all, a very wonderful cast off for a great rewrite ^^

(II, Brad I)

Seriously, i really love the way you write things and describe them now. Your style of writing has improved a lot ^^ I'll have to thank whoever who taught you how to write. I love the witty remarks too xD fruitcake. Love it!

(I, Cal I)

Realistic this one is. No 100 knights all skilled and what not. MOst people would do that just to make things epic. You avoided that blunder and added realism. Also the fact that Cassie was very very flustered and confused instead of being "Huh, i'm in another world *shrug* whatever."

Kaela is very bubbly and inquisitive. BUt you never did mention the age for those two (Cal and Kaela).

(V, Brad II)

I'm skipping Cassie I because i don't WANT to read that one =_= not after what you did to Kaela you monster! Lol plus its basically the same as the 3rd chapter but with action between the werewolves and humans whihc i must comment, is finely put.

This whole chapter is delightfully awesome xD And also i love that dream bit with the ferris wheel ^^ And i really can't wait for the next chapter~ No pressure though ^^ (actually yes a lot of it but i have to pretend not to pressure you =P)

A needle? A needle?! Bal! That's so mean!! I wouldn't say something like that! But I'll give you credit for putting the word 'uncharacteristic'. It was funny though.

It's so sad that Kaela's dead. I thought she'd be some main key to the story. I have to mention that I didn't see enough sad/angry/shocked reaction over her gruesome death. Or maybe everything happened too fast. Whatever it is, her death definitely changed my mood. I can understand why Cassie felt so sad over her death, even though she didn't get to know Kaela.

You know, I would have stabbed the damn thing right at his thingy like Cassie would, but I wouldn't let the pirates kill it. Just let it bleed to death.

Well? Where's Chapter 5?

Aww Bal! You KNOW how much I like Cal!! This is like a bonus chapter for me X3 *gushes*

But you forgot to explain how he looked like! And I'm warning you, if you describe him as anything else BUT handsome you'll find me hanging from your bedroom ceiling at night and spitting nonsense in a raspy voice. You want me to draw him for you? =D

I WANT MORE CAL! MO' CAL!!

Fangirlism aside, from a rat hole to a castle huh? That's a huge change. And ewh, barnacles, wek! >.< Yak yak yak XP ergh XO *dies*

PS: You seem to attack Lance more and more. Subtly, but attacks nevertheless =p

Hehehe, I like two things. The fruitcake. And the screaming. And the way you described Rayne made him sound gentler and more reasonable than the last. I used to have the impression that he's Anas without any feelings.

Okay, as promised. And I'm trying to be really nice here and give you at least one review per chapter.

Like I said in my SMS, your descriptions are far more accurate, although sometimes I get so engrossed in drinking all the details that I forgot that the characters were still having a conversation. Like "Eh, right. They're still talking." kind of feeling. But I wasn't bored because the descriptions are funny and left me grinning. And it's acceptable because you HAVE to introduce the characters, right? It's the first chapter and it's expected.

On the whole, I love chapter one because everyone was there, entertaining dialogues and all the things you wrote about them so accurately described us XD See, I'm biased here. Everyone LOVES reading stuff bout themselves.

so they killed the princess? not cool!

can't wait for your next update!