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| cheated-hearts 2007-10-14 ch 2, | abuseI just want to point out a couple of things. In the first chapter you say that Jordan has eyes like her father's which are hazel, but in this chapter you change her eyes to green. The other thing is that her bother's name if Damein but you change his name to Caleb. Is Caleb his name or Damien? Other than that its coming out really good and i can't wait for the next chapter. |
| FHJL88 2007-09-08 ch 1, | abuseThis is awesome, please update soon! p.s. He sounds really hot. |
| -YourShoesDon'tFit- 2007-07-21 ch 1, | abuseNot much to say, good start. Plz continue! He sounds SO hott! ;) |
| CHIIJOY 2007-07-20 ch 1, | abuseI love the starting. Please update soon. |